Lover’s View
His view
School had started for my fourth year
I had made a new special honest friend
Who would be herself till the very end
Though after awhile my heart had a message to send
With a growing heart it filled with fear
As my interest was beginning to be seen
By my friends who can see past my strongest screen
Her sweet affection could be my fear’s vaccine
Her view
There is something forming in my heart
A small man with humor and rap
Who isn’t fake or full of crap
Fills my heart with lovers tap
The paintings we share could be the start
Time alone lets me know his intention
He doesn’t do well hiding his affection
But for some reason he has my attention
His View
How do I tell her my crush, my loves ordeal
For telling her could destroy this friendship so dear
Letting her know I could be the one to hold her near
That in front of her I could shed my hardest tear
For we are both people that are indeed real
So being fake hiding my feelings wasn’t me
That together our hearts would be free
That no matter what I would never flee
Her View
I don’t know what to make of this man
Telling me his heart is so easily had
He is just a friend is that so bad
There might be more, could this be grand
I need some time to see whats began
Knowing I had some feelings for him too
Could this be loves dearest clue
Would he be forever faithful and true
His View
I don’t know who to trust
A friend says she is taking me for a ride
So I will not give her a chance to hide
Nor giving my confusion a chance to subside
As my words fill with disgust
My drunken stupor can not be reasoned with
As I am explained to that its a myth
My confusion being to subtract forthwith
Her view
His words just spark some anger
How could he say I wasn’t true
Knowing me and all I’ve been through
I liked him a lot this is all I knew
I more or less calmed his drunken stagger
My feelings hurt he left me alone
For me to figure out everything on my own
That I deeply care for you and the tears you’ve shown
His view
Having had my dreams realized
When her lips hit mine I was full of butterflies
I will always feel them when we kiss without any lies
Her love for me is all I need to ever summarize
Her view
With our kiss I was hypnotized
My heart rang out that this was right
That I always wanted him in my sight
And to go to bed with him every night
Based on a true story and A poem dedicated to a friend and his new found girl friend who was so kind to let me know her view to go along with his. Have a great life together friends, I wish you two the best
May 19th, 2010 at 8:45 AM
This seems so much lighter than your usual works. It was good to see you have fun with the different emotions here. Impressed 😉
May 19th, 2010 at 3:33 PM
Though I do agree most of my works are on the darker side of life, every once and while i feel the need to write something with a lighter side, most of my love poems follow this pattern also it was based off a dear friend of mine finding a women that as it seems to be a great match for him.
May 19th, 2010 at 5:43 PM
very enjoyable read,
thank you for the lovely love poem…
Cheers!
May 19th, 2010 at 5:48 PM
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May 19th, 2010 at 7:05 PM
A very interesting read.
Great stuff
May 20th, 2010 at 1:41 AM
i was wondering how you got to match both feelings perfectly well until I saw the dedication at the end. Nice work Man…Cheers!
May 20th, 2010 at 7:17 AM
just great! lovely. 🙂
May 20th, 2010 at 11:35 AM
cool to have both viewpoints to write from, and you captured the feel of the words well.
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May 20th, 2010 at 11:37 PM
Please let me know after you are done with 12 poets commenting.
Many thanks!
😉
May 21st, 2010 at 7:55 AM
nice, love the bounce back and forth and it is fun to play both the light and dark at times…nicely done.
May 21st, 2010 at 11:46 AM
I really liked the alternating views. Perspective is always limited when only seen through one person’s eyes.
-bryan
May 25th, 2010 at 9:25 AM
I like the picture you paint, such a good idea to have both views and the fact its inspired by a real story is beautiful. I could relate to it very much! Keep writing!
June 1st, 2011 at 8:42 PM
I see you like to walk in another’s shoes. Very well done. Are they still together?
June 1st, 2011 at 9:43 PM
No unfortunately their romance was short lived do to ideological differences